Chrysalids: Uncle Axel’s journey

When I was younger I used to pretend to be an explorer. I would dream of discovery, of lands far and shining, waiting for them to be found. It was much doubted by everyone else that these far lands existed, but to me there were as real as the problems that faced my family everyday. People wanted to find more land, food, and a new place to start again. So the logical solution for was to discover a new place all together, investigated or even another place habited!

The first people set out early in the year, people waving there goodbyes, and wishing them farewell. I was only 8 years at the time and so I had a growing curiosity of the world and so asked many questions about where they were going, what they would find and so forth. For the Elders, who everyone knew had the wisdom, the places where they where going to were inhabitable and had no interest to such a man willing to seek his fortune somewhere else, but could not describe what it was actually like. So when I told them I wanted to find out what it was like, all my father did was refuse, and that was that. There was No use arguing with my father, I always lost, usually ending with me locked inside my room and not allowed to go out and play for a few days.

It was only when I had come of the age of fourteen that I dared to try again. I could not stand to just wait around all day doing normal jobs, I wanted to discover. “Axel you may not leave,” my father said,” there are things out there that you don’t know of, you may be possessed by the Blasphemies”. There was much alarm about blasphemies recently as a few months earlier the number of them increased dramatically, people believing that they might overtake the human race and repopulate the earth with their devilish nature. My brother told me “Axel if you leave you will be completely consumed and will not realize that they are wrong and become one of them.” Nobody wanted me to go. I took my chances and hired out a boat with money I had, and did not come back till years later…


One Response to “Chrysalids: Uncle Axel’s journey”

  • dryslic Says:

    There is a very endearing tone to the opening of your story that I like a lot,
    “When I was younger I used to pretend to be an explorer. I would dream of discovery, of lands far and shining, waiting for them to be found”.
    Here you seem to capture something of a youthful, inquisitive tone that suits the story well and works alongside our imaginings of what Axel might have felt like. Occasionally your sentences become slightly muddled, as in,
    “For the Elders, who everyone knew had the wisdom, the places where they where going to were inhabitabe and had no interest to such a man willing to seek his fortune somewhere else, but could not describe what it was actually like.” I really like how you casually drop in phrases like “the Elders, who everyone knew had the wisdom” which seems to show the assumptions of the society without overtly condemning them, however you might do well here to read the whole sentence aloud and think about how it’s meaning might be understood more easily? But well done, a fine beginning. J

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